The very hungry lion (First draft)

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal.

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

           First draft

     The very hungry lion

my pride were glazing in the sun. resting for the Walk to find another place to go up ahead I can smell prey we have know idea what it is Til we see it. as tho we are very hungry and starving my pride hadn't eaten in days so This was our chance. to finally get something within the savannah. me and my Brothers Didn't know how to start off. to get the prey it was pretty hard to get one of them for a Minute. we didn't even bother to try The rumbling of my tummy made me even hungrier. I could feel the tastiness i stroke up on a attack pose. Ready for the fight letting my pride know. That were going in for the attack, We steel in our pose waiting for the right time.                                          

Slowly i went for a move up.I had never felt this good before it was like my heart was pounding .like it forcing me into the herd. As i looked far into the open. i smell the fresh taste of food,I crawled up more with my long stubby paws. Hungry furiously starving As soon and i crawled up i stopped…

Silence argued us. As i could tell something was wrong when i mean wrong very wrong. I wanted this so bad i went out for the kill, when i wasn't supposed to i was shocked with pain as my heart.was trying to come out of me. They started to run as i could tell one would be prey as i was right we went in for the baby calf. I smell the yummy taste of fleshy food in my mouth. Grabbing it with my big jaw. Biting on it As soon we had company the crocodile wanted some to, I refused pulling it away. Harshly it turned into tug of war.as angrier appear over us. But we didn't know we had more company the buffaloes came back with the whole herd and the calf was still alive. I frushed with angriness as I tried to pull it away before the buffaloes could get to us, As i could feel trembling in my heart. The buffaloes were next to us we still tried to get the prey. As one of the buffaloes chased me was hungry tired and couldn't run that fast, I could hear voices in my head. I left the prey to the rest of the pride. Running for my life As I saw that one of the other buffaloes chased one of my pride away chasing it out into the open. I was deeply worried and mad we wouldn't get it. Lighting passes in me The smell and taste of that food went down the drain as we had failed. My body was shaking like a saw going in me.

At Least we tried are best of getting the prey. Better luck next time for us to find and get dinner

this makes me feel good about my work.