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Tuesday, May 2, 2017

My WICKED holiday (Red is edited stuff) Draft


                                                    Highlights


One lovely weekend in the holidays where nothing's going wrong…
YET…
I'm laying in bed as lazy as ever not caring about a single thing outside,
Rooms the same as ever bed is messy mums up i'm still in bed. Trying to fall back to sleep
Knowing...
ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
OHHHHH!?!?
My dramatic life starts now!
My brothers coming down for the holidays The nightmare has just began. It was the first week of the holidays I was still sleepy due to school, Sometimes I’m thankful there's something called a holiday. if it didn't exist I wouldn't even be walking out a door.
Because its more better inside your own house than outside of it because i'm a total shut in :D
I got up as usual turned on the computer.


I didn't make the bed but who am I to care about that I don't even really like my bed being made Ehehe….
Stuck headphones on, went on youtube, listen to nightcore going on 24/7 basically someone live streaming 24/7 all night and all day.
Volume at 100 (I need a 200)

I then go to maple story a dream game of mine A game like no other it has that Vibe, it also has a dragon in it. sometimes I wonder why other games don't have what maple story does.
My main character is Evan a boy distend to be a dragon master with his dragon Mir.
It takes forever to load sometimes but it's worth the wait.
Sometimes I also wonder why my cat eats me alive like i'm some chew toy.
what did I do to it i'm only a harmless shut in.


1 Hour or so I don't know!


Edwards walking in the door of the house i'm ignoring my brother like he doesn't even exist but that's what you get from me.
The plain cold sister who doesn't get along with her own brother Because i'm a shut in
I get up off that lazy bum of mine, Walk out the door and glare at my brother as he's in the bathroom, I keep staring at him even tho staring is rude I have no care in that.

Sometime I wonder even if he is still Edward.
Half way in the day i'm still a shut in I'm more like a loner it doesn't bother me tho I can't even entertain someone.
Edwards from Wellington he used to live with me and mum but then moved in with his dad sometimes I wonder if  his dad know how to raise a child dout it.

He came by plane not car.
As the total shut in as I am everyday it's been half a week since my brother came home
Half a WEEK!?!?!?
It would be better to just throw him out the door OMG HALF A WEEK
Lately I've been on a website involved bendy and the ink machine
A site about a quest for bendy and Boris.
It's Friday the day before a nightmare starts on Monday may life be with us its also haircut day :D This was my haircut <- This her name is Yona.Image result for yona haircut
Yay we went to the Hornby mall inside my mind i'm like noooooooooooo I don’t want to leave the house.
When we got to the
Hornby mall!
We went to my mums hair dressers her names Jennifer she was very popular.
I had to get a haircut due to haircut week or maybe i wanted one I have no idea.... I don't like haircuts because I don’t like being stared at 24/7 it’s creepy you would think people are trying to hit on your or something, the way they stare at you just creeps me out I would be like why you be strain .

Well me and mum  are in the waiting area Edward, Mathew and Nana went to Wendy's to get some food there was even a big Lego man or a person standing in a Lego suit. Whoa no  L-O-G-I-C in that at all. After my haircut was done I got some Wendy's I got a hot dog.
And we went home in the blazing hot sun!?!
How life couldn't get any better.(Life is DRAMATIC,DRAMATIC INDEED)
I remember it was a new day I went into the lounge and laid on the floor and Edward tried to wake me up but it didn't go so well then I gave up got mad And said YOU PERVERT YOU'RE NEVER GONNA HAVE A WIFE LIKE THAT And walked off :) or rather sat on a chair and watched him leave the room crying not my fault he didn't get raised right.

After my
THAT WAS MY DRAMATIC LIFE.

8 comments:

  1. I hope you like this draft
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    Please leave lots of likes and wonderful comments and something that I could fix up.

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  2. What a great piece of writing Ruby, I can really hear your voice, I remember when I was young how much my brother annoyed me. A piece of advice I would give you is to use Read Write to hear where you need to put punctuation. Keep up the great work!

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  3. Thank you I'll be sure to do that next time

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  4. nice it really funny about the cat that thinks you are a chew toy

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  5. Wow yu've been doing a lot of stuff at your holidays and I watch anime too sometimes. Next time how about you make the letters a bit smaller

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  6. Hi Ruby it's Alesha,
    You have written at really good story. Maybe next time you could check your punctuation like capital letters. Here is a example- "Half way in the day i'm still a shut in. I'm more like a loner it doesn't bother me tho I can't even entertain someone." So between the shut in and I'm more... that is where a full stop should be. Any ways good job and work on your punctuation (Capital letters and full stops)
    Good job Ruby.
    -Alesha

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  7. Ruby, Great description of your day in the holidays. I really enjoyed reading about your thoughts and expressions within this piece of writing. Please be aware to re-read your story again adding punctuation, like full stops and commas in the correct place.

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