If so, is that a problem?
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Key Idea
That some teenagers/Children are more addicted to their phones than they should be.
What must you achieve In this paragraph, I am trying to show/prove/explain that...
Some students are more addicted to their phones than they should be. and that its self is dangerous with consequences if ignored.
Information
Key information you need to include
1) What you post
2) People you meet
3) Aftereffects
Delivery
Best paragraph structure to convey all this is.
Over the years our phones have advanced to flip phones to touch screens and because of the touch screen phones teenagers are spending more and more time on their phone on social media instead of getting out and doing something with friends.
Why it matters(Evidence)
Because even though the phone may seem harmless there are many dangers that lie within the apps that you use on the phone, such as Facebook, Instagram, Snapchat and Tiktok. There are reasons I listed these. The reasons are that you are likely to post photos and videos of yourself on them and it's also likely you haven't protected your privacy on them meaning anyone can see what you post and some people on the internet can be really dangerous.
This also consists of the people you meet online, Because we don't have a rule on profile pictures where you can only use your face and not pictures on the internet. There's a high chance that the person you're talking to is not who they say they are. And once they've gained your trust they may ask you personal things or you may give them a password to something which isn't a smart move at all.
And of course, each of these things will have big impacts on your life that you may not like at all. Some of these things may happen at school, you might become an outcast or you'll get blackmailed by the people that have seen that Video/Picture it's also likely that bullying will also come into the picture.
In other cases, it might also involve the police if the person you've been talking to is blackmailing you and threatening you, and none of these is okay.
Sum Up
So even though phones help us a lot sometimes, they are also dangerous if we don't stop and think about what we're doing or who we're talking to.
Delivery
Best paragraph structure to convey all this is.
Over the years our phones have advanced to flip phones to touch screens and because of the touch screen phones teenagers are spending more and more time on their phone on social media instead of getting out and doing something with friends.
Why it matters(Evidence)
Because even though the phone may seem harmless there are many dangers that lie within the apps that you use on the phone, such as Facebook, Instagram, Snapchat and Tiktok. There are reasons I listed these. The reasons are that you are likely to post photos and videos of yourself on them and it's also likely you haven't protected your privacy on them meaning anyone can see what you post and some people on the internet can be really dangerous.
This also consists of the people you meet online, Because we don't have a rule on profile pictures where you can only use your face and not pictures on the internet. There's a high chance that the person you're talking to is not who they say they are. And once they've gained your trust they may ask you personal things or you may give them a password to something which isn't a smart move at all.
And of course, each of these things will have big impacts on your life that you may not like at all. Some of these things may happen at school, you might become an outcast or you'll get blackmailed by the people that have seen that Video/Picture it's also likely that bullying will also come into the picture.
In other cases, it might also involve the police if the person you've been talking to is blackmailing you and threatening you, and none of these is okay.
Sum Up
So even though phones help us a lot sometimes, they are also dangerous if we don't stop and think about what we're doing or who we're talking to.
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